I am the Kat that Walks By Itself

Anyone want to volunteer to be a style-beta for my finish-a-thon fic? The story itself is okay, but I want to make it shine. Any volunteers?

Just in under the wire, since I needed to get it done before I went away. I've sent it to one beta, there may be another, but I think I also need someone to Brit-pick it. Any volunteers? It's Doctor Who, "Parting of the Ways" AU, about 8500 words.
(If you don't hear back from me it will be because I've already gone; I'm leaving tomorrow morning. My time)

I haven't been working on my finish-a-thon story. (sigh) Over the past few days I've been distracted and consumingly inspired to do wallpaper related to the story instead. And today I've gone to the hairdresser, had lunch at parents', and been trying to figure out what to pack.

This one is directly inspired:

And this one arose because my earlier versions of the Rose one, I was trying to do something with this symbol of Rassilon, and I decided to just do one with the symbol itself, instead.

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